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【雅思培训】雅思写作易错点分析


雅思写作备考时,需要提醒烤鸭们盲目的套用句式是不可取的,必须首先做到对这些句式的理解和熟悉。经过大量的练习才能轻松自如地应用在自己的雅思写作作文中


郑州雅思的烤鸭们在写作文的时候总是习惯性的按照脑子里面想的翻译,写完自己觉得特别顺畅,殊不知雅思老师读起来的时候都很费劲,更别提雅思考官了,在阅卷的时候真是一头雾水。在这里,朗阁雅思培训中心的老师挑出来一些典型的案例与大家分享学习,希望对各位烤鸭们的写作有所帮助。


1 首先就得是滥用there be 句型


There are many people moving to cities from countryside.

There are many students believing practical subjects are beneficial .

There are many people supporting this opinion.


说到这些句子大家一定不陌生,这些都是作业中常见的句子,那有什么问题呢?这就要说到there be 句子的功能,there be 句型核心在于状语,尤其是地点状语。当我们汉语的逻辑主语是一个状语尤其地点状语的时候,我们选择there be 句型。例如 树上有只鸟。逻辑主语是树上,我们不可能说in the tree has a bird .   正确翻译为 there is a bird in the tree .

谈到学校教育和家庭教育对比的文章, 学校里有很多同龄人。   there are many peers in schools .


 那么当我们说有人做什么事情的时候或许有人说老师,上面的句子我可以翻译成后面是定语修饰那个人啊,可是这样已经是受中式句式限制过的了。我们写作时议论文,要以表述清楚为要领,所以这时不用就可以了

many people moving to cities from countryside.

many students believing practical subjects are beneficial .

many people supporting this opinion.

这样不是更简洁明了吗


2 滥用 定语从句


我们评分标准里面确实有语法多样性这一项,但也是建立在使用得当的基础啊。

一般我们定语,简单的是一个形容词,比如serious punishment   或者介词短语 如 students from humble background   或者非谓语 如 students receiving job training are more competitive .

 当这些都不能满足修饰要求的时候,我们用定语从句。 如 government should limit computer games which contains a lot of violence and pornography details .

但是老师改作文经常遇到下面的句子。


People tend to buy products which are very practical .

We should learn subjects that are very useful .


这样的句子大家就写成

People tend to buy  practical products .

We should learn useful subjects .

 还有一种同学喜欢堆砌定语从句和there be 句子,比如下面的句子:

 

There are many people who hold the view that vertical city which is filled with tall buildings is the best place where  people live and work in ,while there are others who argue that horizontal city where there are few tall buildings is better . However , I prefer vertical cities which are spacious .


这是一位同学的开头段,读完相信很多同学跟我感觉一样,这是什么意思,开头段的功能是引出话题,亮明观点啊。这样考官真的可以很好的理解我的观点吗。那我们就诊断一下吧。首先there be 不能要了,然后两个 定从也略显啰嗦。


改正之后:

 Nowadays ,many people hold the view that vertical city  filled with tall buildings is the best place for people to live and work in ,while others argue that horizontal city with few tall buildings is better . However , in my opinion , vertical city is more appropriate place for modern life .
 

3  逻辑词用不对。

典型的是 on the one hand  , on the other hand  .在主体段中,表示对比转折的段落才可以用,不能表示并列 。

如  on one hand ,city can provide  a relatively advanced education system .........  on the other hand , city can meet children ‘s medical need .


这里逻辑词就是不对的,段落内容是并列,逻辑词却是转折,应该用表示并列或者递进的逻辑词

city can provide  a relatively advanced education system ......... in addition , city can meet children ‘s medical need .

另外 consequently ,nevertheless 等词是副词,是不可以连接句子的。



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